Self Evaluation

How did the final product come into existence?

As I looked back at my original Midterm piece, I realized the extreme amounts of technicality that was associated with very few descriptions explaining them. I thought to myself, “How can I express my self-realization and the importance of science fairs, as discourse communities, in a unique and coherent way? I knew a change of genre was needed to make the piece by not just exposing what this discourse community is but also convey to any layperson that this fair has some real time value and has of great essence in society. Therefore, in composing my final product, I focused in modifying the original piece into a news article format in order to most effectively demonstrate the reader the importance of the fair as a discourse community. The first and foremost important step in forming this piece was to establish a popular tone throughout the article and placing a good emphasis on the explanations on the various terms throughout the piece (just as any NY times article or Newsday piece does). Once the tone and lay-man’s term was established, the final product came out nicely just as a “fluid waterfall.”

Each section followed one other; the primary introduction of the fair was discussed to help the reader understand the main points of what it actually is and what is to be expected in the rest of the article. Before I diverged into the developments of the main arguments, a clear sense of the actual meaning of discourse communities had to be shown in order to understand the main reasons why the fair is a valuable one! After these breakdowns were analyzed, the values of the actual fair, a discourse community, as an essence for young people could be expressed in a much more cohesive way.

Successes of Revision Process

The final product resembled a lot like a news article due to the catchy, informative phrases about the fair. The formality was brought done a little in order to captivate the reader’s attention in reading about this discourse community and how it can apply to him/her. An efficient approach that helped me accomplish these feats in this product and would be useful for future use was breaking down the product into three main, focused components: tone, context, and style. While this may seem a bit obvious, establishing the genre help set these aspects down and I would continuously reflect on them while I write each of the sections. As an example, for style, the writing was broken down into more concise yet informative statements that would help capture the essence of the idea better. Therefore, the organized structure of the piece came out to be a very essential factor in which it was clearly seen in the final version.

Weaknesses of Revision Process

Though there were many benefits that came with this news article format, a few setbacks did occur in the writing that hindered the reader from understanding the actual meaning of the article (i.e. What is the point that you are trying to get across?). My ideas weren’t connecting with one another; the explanation of the fair didn’t relate to the importance of discourse communities without some clear analysis of it as a whole. Hence, my writing approach did have to change to the three components to accommodate this setback! However, in the end, there was a lax of funny anecdotes/phrases that really could draw any reader in reading this article. In addition, more input from my peers and/or the lay people would make the arguments sound more effective in order to convey a greater sense of importance of the fair! If I had more time to compose this final piece, more time would be devoted in really polishing the format into more fluent sections in order for the reader to get a much better, clearer picture of NYCSEF!

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